It was a
warm, summer holiday at the farm as Olivia climbed the trees to take
photographs with the nature all around her. She tried to look for exciting
things in the abandoned creek . She loves the place even though people litter
in it, they throw bottles and rubbish over the fence and into the water. The
place had a bad smell because of the littering but she didn't mind. The thorns
scratched her on the legs and the willows started to whisper as she felt them.
Without the rubbish the place would look like water and willows and rocks where
Olivia hopped on when taking the photos.
Olivia
climbed a willow tree and clenched her camera tight as her hazel coloured eyes
searched the place, looking for something to take a shot at. She bit her lip
and ran to a place, then another and another with her blondish hair bouncing by
behind her. She wasn't a smart blond but also not bad at class, she not bad at
sports and also not good at it. She definitely loves photography, she takes her
time off after school just to look at things and take pictures of it. To Olivia
photography is peace and is a time to get out all the things in her head, after
the car crash that when she was little.
She saw two
people go by and she closed her eyes. 'Another vision, she thought' . She closed
her eyes for another couple of minutes. 1...2...3... she heard a little girl
counting. She opened her eyes followed the sound. 'Ready or not here I come,
continued the little voice' The whole place looked different, she was having
another one of her visions. She gasped as the whole creek was tidy and clean.
Everything seemed to grow, there were flower beds, beehives and more pretty
things. Then she bobbed down and hid behind a tree as she saw a little girl
skipping along and humming a song to herself. 'I've seen her somewhere' Olivia
thought. Where...have.... I...... then the vision cut off and she was
unconscious. She woke up to see that she was unconscious for about 15 minutes.
She saw her camera about a meter away
from her beside a willow and she stood up to get it. She couldn't see where she
was going until she stepped into a hole, squashing a rabbit and twisting her
foot in horror.
I strongly think that I can focus more in my puntuation.
ReplyDeleteFinau:)