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Tuesday 14 May 2013

Locked: Part 1

It's the last day of school at Reremoana Primary. The students are excited, noisy and rushing to get out of the rainy weather. The sky is black with clouds but every so often it lights up with sight of lightning, followed by loud, rumbling noises. Jacob, a short, smart, sporty, blonde year 8 is spending his last few moments with the school kicking his ball on the rugby field. Everyone has left school except for the cleaners.

The rain is flattening Jacob's gel styled hair and the sound of the dripping makes him need to empty out his bladder, so he sneaks into the toilets while the cleaner isn't looking. He finishes up then heads tot eh mirror to style his hair again. Walking back to go outside Jacob hears the 'click' of someone locking the door. Confused, he rushes to the door and tries to open it. Unfortunately the door was locked. He was right. The cleaners are gone and he is left alone, locked like he's in jail. Petrified, he lets out a blood screeching scream.

'Zap!' A strike of lightning hits the roof of the toilets scaring Jacob so much thats he jumps and runs franticly around the anti-bacterial smelling toilets. He hears another zap of lightning then a crackling noise. Debris falls from the roof smashing to pieces on the floor. "Ohhhhhh, what am I going to do." He panics to himself.

Jacob looks around. "Aha." He bends down and picks up a bobby-pin, walks to the toilet door and starts to twist and turn the hair accessory. 'Click'. The door opens. "Genius!" Jacob congratulates himself."Now...?" He looks up at the sky, the lightning, grey clouds and the rain. He needs to get undercover. Finally he runs to the cloak bay of Room 11. 'Zap!'. Lightning strikes the roof. Jacob runs to Room 12's cloak bay. 'Zap!' Once again the cloak bay  gets demolished by the lightning. It's like the three little pigs with one pig, cloak bays and the lightning, very dangerously, playing the wolf. Jacob takes the courage and sprints, his little legs going faster than cheetah, running towards the gate of the school. With all his power he jumps up and over the gate. Not believing himself, he looks back at the damaged school but pushes himself to run home, faster than the wind.

Suddenly a person dressed in all black steps out in front of Jacob, making him freeze completely in shock. "Hello," Jacob looks up. It's the cleaner, he must of known Jacob went into the toilets! "I am surprised how clever you can be." The cleaner, who's name's also Jacob, grabs Jacob and drags him to a van a couple of meters down the road. He chucks him in the back, locks the backdoors and takes his own seat in the front and drives away.



1 comment:

  1. Wow Gemma that is a really good piece of writing. I enjoyed it thoroughly!

    Lucy

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